Vacuum Insulated, stainless steel, and bpa free
trustworthy, loud, and original
is what I will be
from practices to school,
conditioning and tests,
quenching your thirst is what I do best
Tanning in the sun for four consecutive hours
looking back on my coat of white it's still the same color
I suggest you to not give me out and share
because I do not like germs and I will get nightmares
I could hold water, ice, and also food
but never put fish or I will be in a bad mood
knock off brands try to imitate
but the hydroflask brand is where it originates
If defected I will sweat thinking back on things that I regret
click clack bang
is the sound when it hits the ground
sadness and loss is the thing that I found
Now there's a dent on the outside of me
But that doesn't mean that I lose what I would be
persevering to the damage i continue my job
keeping your drinks hot and cold , I am the thingamabob
cooling drinks isn't just what I do
i make people smile and also you too
i make people smile and also you too
Your poem is good because you talked about your self and you didn't give away your metaphor. You talked about how the hydroflask gives loud noises and how it dents. I like the details of the hydro and the ending was very good. Over all good sentences and good information
ReplyDeleteYour poem is good because you talked about your self and you didn't give away your metaphor. You talked about how the hydroflask gives loud noises and how it dents. I like the details of the hydro and the ending was very good. Over all good sentences and good information
ReplyDeleteYou're metaphor was really easy to catch (which is a good thing). I included a lot of things that related to what the hydroflask is made out of and it's purpose. Also, connected it to how you are went out well too. The poem flowed well, it's structure is orderly. You're word choice is easy for me to understand, and you compared yourself to a hydroflask nicely :)
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